Friday, September 4, 2009

Not a Haiku

a miscounted line
mars my haiku as summer
refuses to fade

Yesterday's previous paltry attempt has too many syllables. Oh well...
Maybe this is better?


still blue pool ruffles
in a hot September wind
and autumn slips in

2 comments:

  1. Well I like them both and I never actually count the syllables.

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  2. what are the rules for Haiku. I really like them and I once had a go in writing one, don't know what happened to it.

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